Ever the critic.
Oh Asmo, there was no plot in the story, nor was there meant to be. It's called characterization, and you can tell a story through only characterization if you wish; it is a legitimate literary technique. The fact you missed this important point makes it difficult for me to take your criticisms to heart.
Thus I will give you a chance to redeem yourself. Answer this question correctly (at least in the same ballpark) and I will take your response seriously: What was the message? Careful and patient readers will know the answer, and I am only interested in what these types of readers think. Harry Potter and Twilight fans can go fuck themselves.
FYI: The calories are only empty if they fail to bring another piece of the puzzle into the light. Admittedly my style is verbose (you nailed it in this respect), but not empty. Each paragraph carries with it importance to the overall message.
Considering that three-fourths of college students hate the literary staples they have to read in their LIT general education courses, I must weed out the useless criticism I might receive. Disliking The Great Gatsby or Frankenstein is understandable, but too many quickly dismiss it as a useless story and attempt attacks on style, pace, ect to justify their attitudes, so I must weed out improper criticism before I accept anything.
Regardless, I thank you for your feedback.
QuoteYou have too much rambling description before anything actually happens.
Oh Asmo, there was no plot in the story, nor was there meant to be. It's called characterization, and you can tell a story through only characterization if you wish; it is a legitimate literary technique. The fact you missed this important point makes it difficult for me to take your criticisms to heart.
Thus I will give you a chance to redeem yourself. Answer this question correctly (at least in the same ballpark) and I will take your response seriously: What was the message? Careful and patient readers will know the answer, and I am only interested in what these types of readers think. Harry Potter and Twilight fans can go fuck themselves.
FYI: The calories are only empty if they fail to bring another piece of the puzzle into the light. Admittedly my style is verbose (you nailed it in this respect), but not empty. Each paragraph carries with it importance to the overall message.
Considering that three-fourths of college students hate the literary staples they have to read in their LIT general education courses, I must weed out the useless criticism I might receive. Disliking The Great Gatsby or Frankenstein is understandable, but too many quickly dismiss it as a useless story and attempt attacks on style, pace, ect to justify their attitudes, so I must weed out improper criticism before I accept anything.
Regardless, I thank you for your feedback.